ofir♥talia♥billy

Once upon a time far far away there was beautiful girl.

Her name was Talia,she lived in a small house.

Talia went to the forest and saw a boy. His name was Billy.

Billy saw the beautiful girl and said ”Hello what is your name?” Talia answered ” My name is Talia”.

Suddenly an old man came and grabbed Talia, .and   (אין צורך) Billy ran quickly to save her but did not succeed.

Talia saw an old man she said ”were I?”    where am I?  the The old man said ”In your twon  town” .

Talia : ”why  Why did you taike take me?!” the   The old man replied : ” I took you Because Billy is a bad boy,  .

Talia : ”Noooo were is Billy ?!” the The old man said agin again ”Billy is a bad boy he wants to kill you!” Talia: ”way   why  does  Billy  wants want to kill me?!” old Old man : Because he kills many girls!!!”

I see Billy , Talia run! Talia run quickly .

Talia saw a boy. The name of the boy was ofir , Billy came fast and started to neat heat ofir but ofir beat him .

Talia and ofir kissed and lived together.

Good Job

קרן

עבודה טובה

Spelling – 7

Grammar – 15

Clarity and coherency – 30

Five elements – 35

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